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The Black Piranha

The Black Piranha

Walt: write a story

Black piranha’s are known to have the sharpest teeth on earth. One bite and a fountain of blood will spew out. I once went to South America and caught a piranha but did not know that it wasn’t dead. I wanted to take a look at its teeth and “SNAP!” I got bitten like it was a gunshot through my finger. My hand hit the ground as I was so scared and hurt.

The black piranha are deadly monsters in the jungle waters. The black piranha was very dark in colour. It wasn’t a real monster because of its small size. It had a bundle of superior choppers which meant their teeth were as sharp as a knife. They had burning red eyes that really popped out with colour. The piranha’s are distinctive and have a stocky body like a bulldog. They are very maneuverable which means they move incredibly quickly. The piranha’s hunt on their own at unbelievably fast pace. They have a tatty tail because piranha's are cannibalistic. They usually take a big chunk of their own kind but still keep the piranhas alive.

At first I thought that sharks were dangerous. It’s so amazing how there are many deadly sea creatures in this world but also really scary at the same time. Next time I will travel a country where there are no deadly creatures. I’ve been through it and I’m not making the same mistake.

The Chief of Te urewera: Tama's Revenge

The Chief of Te urewera: Tama’s Revenge  

walt: Create a Maori myth (narrative)

walt: write an impactful introduction to our Maori myth.

Stomp, Stomp! Every step was as loud as the step of an enormous elephant. In the bright island of Te urewera lived a chief named Manaaki. The island had the softest sand and the most crystallized water. He was extremely loving and never gave up on anything. His eyes were as deep as the ocean blue. The only person that disliked him was Tama. Who knows what Manaaki had done to make Tama hate him.

One day Chief Manaaki questioned Tama “what do you want from me?” his reply was, “ Nothing! I don’t want anything from you, you mean big head!.” Tama was full of hatred boiling like a hot cauldron inside. Manaaki asked him “Is my head really that big?” while feeling his head. “OMG! just leave!” Tama shouted.

Three days later Tama was absolutely fed up, so he decided to kill Chief Manaaki. Later in the night Manaaki fell asleep. That was when Tama got thirsty for revenge. He got his patu and snuck out where Manaaki was sleeping. Clang! Tama stopped and realised that he had knocked something over, the feeling of fear spread across his face whilst looking over at Manaaki’s face. What he didn’t know was when Manaaki hears something loud he knows when someone is around and starts pretending to sleep. Tama had his patu over his head, suddenly Manaaki woke up and ran to get his patu. Tama and Manaaki started battling throughout the night.

Tama and Manaaki fought, pillow shreds floating everywhere as the patu’s flew all over the place shredding and smashing Manaaki’s belongings until they exhausted themselves. Manaaki popped the question to Tama “Why are you so mad at me? What have I done to make you so upset?” Tama began to explain, “Well, remember centuries ago we had competed in many activities, and in all those activities you won? I thought we were friends, you didn’t know how much I wanted those trophies!”

“Oh so this is what its all about!” Sighed the chief relieved to finally understand, “I still want to be friends with you. I’m really sorry Tama and to make it up to you I want to give you one of my trophies” Manaaki replied while handing the trophy over to Tama. Tama cried with excitement “Thank you so much and it’s alright and I would love to be your friend as well!” tears falling down his face as he grinned from one ear to the next.

A few months later, Tama and Manaaki were the best of friends and they worked on everything together. A Few days later they had just won their first  battle against other people from another island. From there, Tama and Manaaki promised each other they would stick together no matter what.

Be Kind

Walt: Be kind in class

Python Takes Action

Walt: write a combined story.

Pythons Taking Action

African pythons are known to be poisonous and very deadly, they also can have rapid speed on their prey. African pythons obviously live in Africa near the river side where most animals live. The python will eat any animal that it finds. They have scales as much as a fish, they also are really long. African pythons slither fast but quietly because they do not want their prey to notice them.

When python's search for its prey they go to the river as that is where all animals go to drink water. As the python soon reached the water it saw a hippo in the water and hippos are the most deadliest animals. Slithering out of the water it camouflages itself to hide away from the hippo. The python camouflaged the whole night waiting patiently for the hippo to go away.

As the night goes by, the hippo falls asleep. Thats when the python takes action. As midday comes by, it got ready for his ambush. When the springbok was in place it  waited for the correct timing and exploded out of the water for its jaw open wide. Squeezing the springbok and coiling around it the python soon swallowed it whole.

Pythons don’t need to eat for another whole year because the springboks are really huge. The more the pythons eat the longer they can survive without food. As soon as the year goes by the pythons start to hunt for food again. Pythons can also stay underwater for 15 minutes, if they need to breathe they will only put their nostrils out of the water.

Refllections: I think it was really easy working with others, because after combining our paragraphs we changed some sentences to make it work. I think we should write combined stories more often.

Procedural Writing

Walt: write a procedure for making jam biscuits

Success Criteria: use a verb to begin every  step in the method.

Ingredients :

½ a cup of butter

½ a cup of sugar

1 egg

2 cups of flour

1 tsp baking powder

1 tbsp milk

Jam ( any flavour )

Method :

Preheat the oven to 180°

Warm up the butter to make it soft.

Add the butter to a bowl.

Measure the sugar and add it to the bowl.

Cream the butter and sugar together.

Crack the egg and add it to the bowl.

Combine the egg with the butter and sugar.

Measure the flour and add to the bowl along with the baking powder.

Pour 2 tbsp of milk.

Mix it all up until it becomes doughy.

Grab a spoonful and shape it into a ball.

Make a dent in the middle of the ball with your finger.

Place the ball into a tray.

Add some jam to the middle where you made the dent.

Insert the tray into the oven and bake it for 15 minutes.

My Best Holiday

Walt: Write a recount with focus on expensive words.

On a burning hot summer day in January I was very dull and wanted to do something. I thought of an idea and wanted to go to the Water Park in the City. I asked my dad about it and he replied with a “Yes.” It was only 11:30 when we left.

It was only a half an hour drive to the City. Sooner or later we appeared at the Water Park. I got so excited that I ran to the reception as fast as a cheetah. Once My dad came he paid for me and my brother to go in. I was already in my togs.  I walked up the dreadful stairs to get to the top of the slide. I reached the top but I was a bit scared because it was high. I closed my eyes and carefully slid down the slide, it was astonishing. I was amazed.

Then I had a little swim because I was bored. I then went back up on the top of the slide and this time I pushed myself to go faster, It was so cool. I went on the slide a few times. Then I stopped because I was tired.

After that my brother and I did a challenge to see who can do more tricks in the pool. So we had some fun. We got so tired that we wanted to go home. My brother and I got changed and got back into the car and my dad drove us back home.

Once we got home my brother and I got very hungry and tired. So we had some food. I really had fun at the Water Park. I wish I can go back next time.

Tooth Tradittions Around The World

Walt: look for information.

Tooth Tradition

All around the world, there are many tooth traditions and I really want to know some because some tooth traditions are  interesting and some are funny. Instead of putting your teeth under your pillow you could do other things with your teeth.

Malaysia :

Malaysian kids bury their teeth in the ground with soil. They believe that the teeth is a part of their body so it will come back to earth.

Egypt:

Egyptian kids wrap their tooth in a tissue and then they go outside and throw it at the sun. They throw at the sun because they are asking the sun to give them a brides tooth and take their buffalo tooth. A brides teeth is a beautiful set of teeth. A buffalo teeth is a nasty set of teeth.

Sweden:

Swedish children put their tooth in a glass of water. In the morning a coin will mysteriously takes place of the tooth in the glass of water.

Pakistan:

Kids in Pakistan wrap their tooth in some cotton and then they go outside when the sun sets. Then they go to a nearby river and throw it for good luck.

Burma:

Burmese kids take their tooth and then they go outside with their parents and they close their eyes and say a poem that goes like this

Mouse , Mouse wherever you are please take my tooth and give me back a royal tooth in return. Then they throw it . Their parents will tell them that the mouse will come and take it and give him/her a royal tooth.

Thats all the tooth traditions I picked . There are many more tooth traditions. My favourite tooth tradition was the Pakistan one. I liked that one because I like how the kids have to throw it when the sun sets.

Interview of a friend

My friends name is Jasmine Violet Makaylah Gage Campbell  . She is 10 years old . Her  favourite game to play is tennis . Her stunningly favourite colour is purple . The number of siblings she has is 2 - 1 brother and 1 sister . Jasmine’s favourite  weekend activity is playing games and going to her favourite places . Lastly her favourite rugby players are Ma’a nonu and Dan Carter .

Report on Seagulls

I am learning about seagulls

seagulls are seabirds of the family named laridae for short it is called laris.

Seagulls are typically medium to large birds . They have really long wings so that they can fly anywhere they like. Without their wings they can't fly or go anywhere they want . Their wings are really important to them because they can fly everywhere and find food for them and their babies too.

Seagulls have a beak which is really sharp and can also cut you . They have a beak so that they can grab the food. Since seagulls have no hands they have a way of grabbing things with their beaks .

Yazmin at the beach

On a beautiful Saturday me and my 5 friends went to Mission Bay at 11:30 am in a shiny green van. first my mum and me went to pick my friends they told me where they lived and yeah we went to the beach.

When we reached Mission Bay me and my friends ran to the side where the sand was while my mum took out our towels and food.After a minute we got really bored and my idea was to make a sandman because it was december and it was nearly christmas and i wanted to do a snowman but out of sand so i thought of calling it a sandman.

Later we were halfway done cause we had to do the face and then we finished that was fun .

After all that we had to leave the sandman and pack up because my mum was waiting for me and my lovely friends to come home so there we went in the car. That was so cool and I wish I could go there again.